What the audit said, and what v2 did with it.

Version 55 · 2026-10-19

Grayson's read, and what changed.

From his "Web Copy Feedback" email of Saturday Oct 17 and the Oct 14 call. Applied to both homes unless it says otherwise.

The email

1. Testimonials under each section: one from an audience member and one from a musician. Gordon: every quote stays directly related to the content beside it, so audience quotes sit with audience sections and performer quotes with the rest; both kinds only where both fit.
2. "It's what you don't say." A vibe of "we're the best"; leave the musician room to work it out; pull the competitor section until there's a better gauge. The competitor section is off both homes (the research stays on file for Brian). The lines that might still read that way, for the call: "Seriously, it's a powerhouse" (Grayson's own line), "What more do you need to know?", "Used at real gigs every weekend" (v2 hero), "Tuned for bigger tips" (v2).
3. Too text-heavy; show more than tell, mainly the feature list. The features page now shows a screen beside each group, with a note that a short walkthrough video per group replaces most of the words once filmed.
4. Home hero: v2 is better. v1 now carries v2's hero: three claims and the proof line.
5. "They request. You decide what gets played." leans legal; "v1 of this text nails it." v2 now opens that section with v1's line, "If you're playing for tips, you might as well be good at it." and the bold venmo line. "Requests aren't commands" softened to "You always choose what you play", no "legally".
6. "Built on stage, not in a conference room" is killer. Stays in v2's founder block; v1 could take it too.
7. Drummers: keep the dig. Kept, with the drummer's own line added: "it's really a cymbal of a greater problem."
8. "I" and "we" are mixed; say "we". "We" everywhere outside the two letters: the proof section, the Monday video, "we build this thing in public", "(You can turn this off, but we wouldn't.)"
9. A brand entity like CU3 or Clippy to soften the edges. Not built. A question for the call.
10. His new About letter. On the page as he wrote it, lyric lines kept: cigar-stenched fingers, "I play, I work, and I want to do and be better", quadrupled then 10x, $40–80 a night to a $300 average, the 6-hour night at a 4-hour gig and over $600 in tips, "they called my bluff". The home teasers open the same way. The "hands in my pockets" list and "I cut everyone else out" went with it.

Version 61, 11:00: v2 revised from outside notes

• Order: hero, the audience and performer visual, proof of earnings, then the app gallery, then the rest (the gallery moved up from below the utilities).
• "Stacked with musician utilities" is now "You came for more tips. You'll probably stay for the gig tools."
• The previous v2 is kept as "v2 before 11:00" in the tab strip.

From the Oct 14 call, now in

• The venmo line in bold.
• "Smart search by title, artist(s) and writers."
• "Suggested request amounts."
• Payments: Venmo, Zelle and Cash App added to Gordon's list.
• v1 hero: the subhead under the headline came out (Grayson: redundant with the claims).
• The triptych's third panel is Chicken Farmer; Gordon takes pickleballer.
• The set-lists card: describe the gig, paste the show notes or snap a photo, the AI builds it.
• The stats card: audience behavior, your notes, an AI recap and more detailed metrics than you'll ever need.
• The patio quote says "a full hour", as tested live.
• "(You can turn this off, but we wouldn't.)" in parentheses.
• Monday video: what last week's gigs paid; "from the stage" cut from the walkthrus card.
• The Wonderwall quote rewritten so it understands the cooldown.
• "A nickelodeon is an old-timey jukebox, BTW."
• Gordon's panel: Marketer. Enthusiast. Pickleballer.

Still Gordon's call

• "Publish your queue, or don't" is dropped: the app doesn't show the queue and shouldn't (Gordon).
• "Plug requests to the audience" now reads "Tell the audience you take requests", a stand-in until he writes the line.
• The Elvis satire quote moved to "What more do you need to know?" on both homes.
• The short URL still reads tipelodeon.com/your-name; the real path is /project/your-name and the tiny domain is unsettled.
• Release notes: still the twelve samples; the repo is not wired up.